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Postby matheson45 » Wed Aug 11, 2010 2:06 am

Yo're reeeeaaalllyyyyyyy goood!!!!!!!!!!! you got talent and it wasn't boring at all. You are good at describing things, not too long, just enough! keep it up and i would like to read more! if you get it ready send it to me my email:

j.h7@luukku.com
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Postby justice7 » Wed Aug 11, 2010 2:28 am

i liked it a lot! thanks for reading mine too btw. uh i love the description you have in yours. it gives me a lot of ideas for mine. i think you should finsih it.
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Postby torrence36 » Wed Aug 11, 2010 2:38 am

i liked it, :D i wanna know what happens when she goes to the school, if she does? :) lmao keep at it :D x
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Postby fridolph » Wed Aug 11, 2010 2:52 am

WOW!!
this is Great i think
you should keep writing
i want to keep reading
its not a book yet!!!
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Postby puw » Wed Aug 11, 2010 3:02 am

Hey, It's really good, no joke! The only thing I spotted (and I don't even know if I'm right...) was the fact that you had '-ed' words in the present tense. I would suggest writing the whole thing in the past - it's so much easier that way.
Good luck!
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Postby felamaere66 » Wed Aug 11, 2010 3:14 am

While I was reading I said to myself "I think I should go to chapters and buy this book!" then I realized it's not published and its a draft :P
You should definitely keep doing this and fix it up a little! You sort of rushed it but I would definitely read the book!
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